(14)雅思屠鸭第十四天：大作文优缺点类题目攻略

作文考试基本常识

小作文快而准确。大作文慢一点。好一点。
格式顶格写，段落之间空行。

大作文评分标准

审题部分，注意题干，雅思一定是一定范围内展开讨论。
观点部分，不能多（同一段话中first sencend last but not least…）也不能少（翻来覆去老是同一个观点）。不要举栗子，举例子是个人相关的，不普遍。
用词部分，为了词汇多样性，换了很多不同意思的词。语言能力要用动词的灵活和准确性来体现。

大作文完成的步骤与问题

大作文角度

测试

题目：

The increase in people’s life expectancy means that people have to work older to pay for their retirement. The alternative is to start working at a younger age. Does this alternative have positive or negative effects?

优缺点题目注意事项：

1. 开头段

替换词：

the increase in people’s life expectancy：

the improvement of life expectancy
the increased lifespan
living longer lives

Work older:

prolong working lives
work in the old age
delay retirement
postpone retirement

Pay for their retirement:

cover the cost of retirement
cover basic needs in the old age
cover expenses in later life

Working at a younger age:

embark on career early
enter the workforce early

开头段范例：

Instead of delaying retirement, some people today consider the option of entering the workforce early in order to save sufficient money for expenses in later life. I would argue that the problems of this strategy outweigh its advantage.

重复题目，并亮明观点。

2. 主体段一

A 提前工作 B知识不够 C 收入不高
背景：现在的社会经济从体力工作转移到脑力工作
背景：脑力工作需要文凭
解释：仓促进入职场最后只能做体力活
解释：体力活的经济价值不高，收入不高
对比：脑力活产生高价值产品，收入高
拓展结果：提前工作，赚钱也不多

范文：

Leaving school early means that people are not well-equipped to handle high-paying jobs in the workplace. The economic transformation has seen a massive transition from manual work to intellectual jobs, which cannot be performed without an intimate knowledge of theories and technologies related to a specific subject area. People who make a hasty decision to enter the workforce may find themselves end up doing some physical work, such as working on the farm or in the garage. These occupations normally offer a living wage only because the economic value of these jobs is limited compared with those in technological sectors, such as information technology, bioscience and artificial intelligence, which involve the provision of high-value products and services. Because of this, despite long working lives, these people may not be able to earn more money than those who stay at school longer and graduate with qualifications to find work in well-paid industries.

3. 主体段二

A 提前工作 B 做体力活 B 职业生涯也会比较短
背景：低收入工作的工作环境不好
解释：高压力的环境可能导致各种健康问题
解释2：使用各种机器，事故率比较高，职业可能提前结束
解释3：即便60岁还健康，可能也没有体力去继续做这些工作

范文：

Another problem worth mentioning is that the career for people doing some poorly-paid jobs may not last as long as expected. Without a strong academic background, they may have to tolerate unappealing working conditions if they find employment in some fields of work, such as plumbing, construction and manufacturing. They are more prone to some health problems as stressful working settings can cause sleep difficulty, mood swings and high blood pressure, which can take a toll over time. These jobs also entail the operation of machines and devices which can sometimes lead to injuries or even deaths. The logic is that their careers can be abbreviated by some accidents. Even though they can stay healthy until they turn 60, the question remains whether they are still physically capable of undertaking those tasks that require physical strength.

4. 主体段三

A提前工作 B 早点积累经验C 职业更能成功
范围：自学能力很强的人
解释：总结自己的问题，寻找信息去增加知识
解释：实际能力和知识结合，更加能够发展事业
举例：有些知名的创业家就是辍学也能成功

范文：

On the other hand, for those people who are adept at self-education, embarking on the career as early as possible can be advisable. The capacity to learn differs from person to person, and some autonomous learners may be able to acquire knowledge from various sources beyond a formal educational setting. Starting their work early, they may reflect on the problems they encounter in the workplace and advance their knowledge by finding relevant information online ro in books. With a mix of know-how and practical experience, they can advance their career gradually and manage to achieve successes. This has been supported by numerous examples found in renowned entrepreneurs who rise to prominence despite dropping out of school.

5. 结束段

In conclusion, for the majority, working from a young age is by no means an effective measure to save money for retirement, although there are some exceptions.