雅思大作文范文解析：孩子是否应该每天使用电脑

2018 年 11 月 28 日

来源：朗播网

摘要：大家恐惧雅思写作的原因，无外乎是审题有误写跑题、思路混乱不知从何下笔或者语言能力不达标等。就算手握大量范文、天天读范文，也不知该如何吸收文章里的营养和精华，更难以将这些素材、思维方式和知识点运用到自己的写作里。针对这个问题，朗播雅思为大家精心准备了雅思大作文的范文解析，我们将从多个维度细致且深入地解构和探讨范文。今天讲解的题目是：孩子是否应该每天使用电脑？

## 题目

Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children.Do you agree or disagree?

题型：同意与否

翻译：每天使用电脑对孩子的消极影响要大于积极影响。你是否同意这一观点？

## 写作结构

开头段：个人立场 + 理由陈述

主体段1：(赞同/反对应当每天使用电脑)理由 1 + 论证

主体段2：(赞同/反对应当每天使用电脑)理由 2 + 论证

让步段：不可否认掌握电脑技能的积极影响 + 论证

结尾段：总结理由 + 重申观点

## 范文分析

### 开头段

首先明确表示同意此观点，然后给出理由。

个人立场：I tend to agree that young children can be negatively affected by too much time spent on the computer every day.

理由陈述：This is partly because sitting in front of a screen for too long can be damaging to both the eyes and the physical posture of a young child, regardless of what they are using the computer for.

### 主体段1

主要的一点是电脑吸引孩子们的地方，通常是一些非常暴力的游戏。而沉溺于暴力的电脑游戏，孩子会变得自我中心，对外界麻木无感。

主题句：However, the main concern is about the type of computer activities that attract children. These electronic games tend to be very intense and rather violent.

递进解释：The player is usually the ‘hero’ of the game and too much exposure can encourage children to be self-centred and insensitive to others.

### 主体段2

孩子们虽然可以通过电脑获得信息、联系朋友，但无法代替人与人的交往。孩子成长过程中需要真实的经历，这是电脑无法给予的。

主题句：Even when children use a computer for other purposes, such as getting information or emailing friends, it is no substitute for human interaction.

递进解释：Spending time with other children and sharing non-virtual experiences is an important part of a child's development that cannot be provided by a computer.

###让步段

不能否认掌握电脑技能对孩子的积极影响。信息技术时代掌握电脑技能很重要，要在小的时候学习这项技能，以便在未来的学习和工作中使用。

主题句：In spite of this, the obvious benefits of computer skills for young children cannot be denied.

递进解释：Their adult world will be changing constantly in terms of technology and the Internet is the key to all the knowledge and information available in the world today. Therefore it is important that children learn at an early age to use the equipment enthusiastically and with confidence as they will need these skills throughout their studies and working lives.

### 结尾段

总结理由 + 重申观点

I think the main point is to make sure that young children do not overuse computers. Parents must ensure that their children learn to enjoy other kinds of activity and not simply sit at home, learning to live in a virtual world.

## 重点表达

tend to agree 比较同意......

be insensitive to 对......麻木不仁

It is no substitute for... 无法代替......

non-virtual experiences 非虚拟的(真实的)体验/经历

看完以上范文细致解析，大家是否感觉比先前更豁然开朗了呢？当然我们还要友情提示一点：范文仅为考生提供某一角度的写作思路，建议大家充分利用朗播智能训练产品拓展思维，并学习借鉴范文的结构和表达方式，从而综合提高自己的写作水平。

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